Have you ever felt in long distance
relationship with your boyfriend? How did you feel when you were separated by
the time and the distance? Did you miss him? If you missed him, what did you
do? What did you do to manage your time for just had a call or to meet him? What
were the things that made you missed him? Missing someone whom you love is
something which is common for everyone. Without exception, this also happens in
my life. I have a boyfriend but we almost never met. He is in java and I am in
Bali. Because of our study, we have to be apart. This is why I always miss him.
Every day, I think about him. I really miss his appearance, his personality,
and the way he loves me.
He is a good boy. He always respects
to his family, especially his parents. Whatever his parents say, he always does
it. He never denies anything that is ordered to him. Sometimes, the thing that
makes me a little bit annoyed was when we have a date suddenly his parents
called and asked him to go home. I was thinking that I could not be egoist. So
I let him went home and have a date next days. Besides, he is a polite boy.
This is seen by the way he came as a guest in my house. The way he speaks, the
intonation, and also the way he greets my parents show that he is polite. I am
lucky to have a good boy like him.
Every girl loves a romantic boy,
including me. Fortunately, he is a romantic boy. Every night, he sends me a
poetry that tells his feeling to me. He also sends me a bucket of flower in
every special day, like in valentine day, in our anniversary, in my birthday,
and other special days. He knows that I am a spoiled girl, so he loves me and
adores me like he loves his family. Besides, we love traveling or going
somewhere. When he comes from Java, he accompanies me to go wherever I want.
This all makes me love and always miss him.
He is a perfect boy. I think every
girl will adore my boyfriend if they know the characteristics of my boyfriend.
He is an attractive, good, and romantic boy. I just never imagine that I will
have a perfect boy like him. I am lucky as a girl to have a boyfriend like him.
It is a good writing Padmitri. You have done your best. :D
BalasHapusYou are so lucky to have a boyfriend like him. I hope you can have a long last relationship with him. :)
Overall, your writing is good. You have good grammar on it.
However, I think you have to pay attention on the mechanic.
For example, the sentence in the third paragraph.
You wrote, "Whatever his parents say he always does it."
I was so confuse when read it. So, I think it is better if you write, "Whatever his parents say, he always does it." or you can write, "He always does whatever his parents say."
I hope my comment can be useful for you. :)
Thank you Padmitri. Keep writing. :)
Your writing is very good Padmitri. The way you describe your boyfriend is very interesting. The organization and mechanic are good as well. But, pay attention for the grammar. In the first paragraph, the sentence "What did you do to manage your time for just had a call or to met him?" should be "What did you do to manage your time for just had a call or to meet him?"
BalasHapusOverall, your descriptive text is very good and interesting... :)
You have such a lovely boyfriend Padmitri ^^ I hope your relationship last forever!
BalasHapusyou always do your bect Padmitri. Your organization and mechanic are good. You can mind your language so it becomes a nice story. Fighting and keep writing dear.
BalasHapusthank you so much for you comments. I'll revise it.
BalasHapus