My
ex- Boarding House
I will never forget my experiences
when I was in Senior High School. At that time, my friends, Gayatri, Sawitri,
Tiwi, Fuji, Ayu, Anes, Novi and I rented a house in Singaraja. We are from
Bontihing and it is so far from our school, SMK Negeri 1 Singaraja. Because of
that, we decided to rent a house near the school and stayed together. After
having a boarding house, we thought that we could concentrate to our study, but
what we expected was useless. During the days we stayed, we found lots of
things that made us felt uncomfortable. That horrifying house in Wibisana
Street Number 34 made us moved.
There were lots of gangsters around
the house. The worst problem was the gangsters have a leader, named Kampek, but
we used to call him “Batara Kala”. In
Bali, Batara Kala is a name of
creature that has bad attitude, bad temperature, bad manner, bad characteristics,
and bad behavior. He was like Batara
Kala, that’s way we used to name him Batara
Kala. Moreover, his house was in front of our house. Can you imagine what
we could do at that time? It’s totally scaring us. Everything should be by his
permission. We were not allowed to be noisy, we were not allowed to laugh
loudly, we were not allowed to turn off the light at night, we were not allowed
to invite our friends, and we were not allowed to go out after 9 p.m. One day, my best friend visited me in the
evening. At that time, he went back home at 10 p.m.,then a group of gangster in
Bale Banjar said “How satisfied you are! Surrounded by 8 girls, can I have
one?” what a shame! I really wanted to get their mouths one by one and told
them that he is my friend. He just visited me. He didn’t do something as they thought.
I felt flared up to the gangsters besides I was so embarrassed to my friend. He
is a good man and he just wanted to care with me but what he got was a
disappointment. Since the incident happened, he never came again even in my new
boarding house. The other friends also never came. They didn’t want to visit me
and my friends because they knew that the gangsters used to disturb us.
Besides, we often quarreled with Batara
Kala. I remember at that time at 5p.m, Fuji was eating in front of the
door. Suddenly, Batara Kala came in
drunk and said madly “Hi… would you marry me? If you want, I’ll divorce my wife
and live with you (he said with a laugh). Fuji replied “yes, it’s okay as long
as you divorce your wife first, if you dare”. I wondered what was on his mind,
and then he went mad and broke into our home. He hit Fuji’s head and face. We
tried to against him. We cried together while trembling all day long but no one
helped because they were also scared of him. A sentence shouted from Anes’s
mouth “I swear if you have a daughter, later her dignity will be debased”. “I
am not afraid” he said while getting back to his house. What in our mind at
that time was “why there is no one comes and helps us”. Without thinking, I
called my uncle for a help. The day after that incident, he also made a problem
with the neighbor. He hit the neighbor’s cheek. It really made us felt
uncomfortable and just wanted to move from there.
The house was very horrible. We
found a lot of strange incidents especially at night. As what the neighbor said
to us, Sawitri’s bedroom used to be a well and a well is used to be scaring.
Besides, there were bushes behind the house which added the frightfulness of
that house. Every night, we heard a strange sound at the back and sometimes from
the bathroom and also from the kitchen. We used to see and hear the kitchen
tools moved by themselves. We ever heard a sound like someone was eating at the
back because the spoons were very noisy. When we spied it, suddenly it stopped moving
and then came again and again. It was not strange again to find the light was
on and off. One day at night when Sawitri and Anes stayed at the boarding house
while I and the others were praying in Jagatnata temple, the light was on and
off and the kitchen tools were so noisy. They ran off the house and cried.
Because of anxiety, we lodge in our teacher’s house in Kerobokan village for
two days. Since that incident, we used to take a bath together, sometimes four
persons together was common for us. The unforgettable moment is when Tiwi and I
got a shower. We saw a shadow like someone entered to Sawitri’s room. We asked
our friend but no one of them entered to Sawitri’s room. How scared we were.
Moreover, everyone who came to our boarding house felt so scared before we told
the stories or incidents we ever had. They felt something strange when they came
to that house. We didn’t want to stay in anxiety for a long, so we invited a
shaman, a person who is called “Balian” in Bali to predict what kind of
creature was there and what were the solutions. We did not know whether the
shaman right or wrong. He said that the house was full of ghost. This all made
us lived in an anxiety.
We really didn’t know that the
environment in that house was so bad. We just thought that we got a large house
but it’s cheap. Four rooms, one bathroom and one kitchen inside were only five
million a year. Who would not be aroused to rent it? We didn’t know what kind
of environment it was. We just thought about that cheap price so we rented it.
Finally, we could not study because our concentration was troubled by the
music. Every day, Batara Kala invited his friends to come to set music in Bale
Banjar. There was no day without music for them. Sometimes, the neighbor beside
our house did the karaoke every morning. We were troubled, totally troubled. A
lot of children also used to play in our yard and made a noise. They yelled
loudly moreover they came in our house and shouted at us. We did not know what
our mistakes were. We really didn’t understand. Oh God! It was really annoying.
Batara Kala also often quarreled with
his wife. Every woman do not like have a husband like him, I think. A husband
should work and earn some money for his family. Might be that was the cause why
his wife always got angry to him. Besides all of that noisy, there was
something that made me uncomfortable. At six o’clock when we got up, we found
all of our goods outside the bedroom. A thief has destroyed our house. Oh my
God! We couldn’t help staying there anymore.
At the end of the second grade, we
decided to move to Pulau Lombok Street. We could not stay any longer at that
house which was full of gangster, horrible and bad for students. One lesson for
us, don’t be aroused to a cheap price.
Well Padmitri, I can't imagine if your story happen to me. I think it is so hard to be stayed any longer there. Moving is the best choose Padmitri.
BalasHapusI like your story, it is so interesting. You have a good structure in you story and also grammar as well. You must pay attention on mechanics in your story, you have to check your commas, capital letters, and the period at the end of all the sentence. For example in this sentence "One day, my best friend visited me in the evening. At that time, he went back home at 10 p.m. then a group of gangster in Bale Banjar said “How satisfied you are! Surrounded by 8 girls, can I have one?” what a shame! I really wanted to get their mouths one by one and told them that he is my friend. " It should be better if the word "then" write in capital letter after the period.
Overall, I love your writing Padmitri..
Keep working :D
thank you very much lisna. I'll revise it.
BalasHapus